Monday, February 17, 2014

New York

The people
the light in their eyes almost as bright
as the lights on the streets
the buildings
the signs
the cars
reflecting
blinding
they all looked like children who have
just seen their first glimpse of the world
or maybe adults who have just met the
love of their life.
But they didn't know that yet
She has a purple dress
black tights
nude heels
He has a suit
with a tie
or maybe he doesn't
and maybe she does.
They say its where dreams are made or maybe
where they come true.
To me its where everyone is everyone and where
you are you.

I used enjambment, assonance of ō, and end stopped lines.

3 comments:

  1. Katie,

    I really liked the ending of your poem. It changed a little because in the beginning you were explaining the surroundings, and toward the end the poem was about love and how New York is special and magical.

    Great Blogging,

    Amanda

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  2. Katie,

    I really loved your poem! I know how you love New York, so I wasn't surprised when your wrote a poem about it. I really thought that you did a great job with describing New York.

    Good job!

    Chanler

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  3. Katie, this is great! You should think about submitting it to Troubadour!

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